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Ragdoll by ~KamikazeGeisha:iconKamikazeGeisha:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Spoken Word


C’mon Ragdoll,
            follow me.
            We’re going for a ride
            and it’s your            duty
            to be dragged along.

C’mon Ragdoll,
            play with me.
            I want to have some fun
            and I can’t do that
            if we aren’t touching.

C’mon Ragdoll,
            look at me.
            Why won’t you jump into my arms
            the second I turn a corner?
            It’s what you must do,
                        so get to it.

C’mon Ragdoll,
            listen to me.
            I’m your owner and master;
            your sole purpose is
            my bidding.

C’mon Ragdoll,
            be with me.
            I need someone to force my love on
            and who else is perfect
            for the job,
            but you, my little tease?

RAGDOLL!
            You can’t speak back;
            you can’t be “you”
            for “you” is merely being “mine”.
            You’re not an individual,
            you’re a DOLL!

So sit there and look pretty
until I want to play.

That’s your sole existence―
            to obey.
©2009 ~KamikazeGeisha
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Author's Comments

Written: 2/20/09

I can't remember when I eddited this poem. It was brief, though.
COMMENT EDIT(5/2/09)
Well, this has some basis in the new show(not as new now) Dollhouse. I really enjoyed it; and suggest that you give it a chance when you're bored{I think it's on Fox...}. It's about these people that can be given any personality and are sold for 24-hour or weekend use. So, like dolls, they become whoever the biggest bidder wants of them, Sick, huh?
So, I thought, what do those people think when they buy a person?
(Or at least, that's one way to interpret the poem:))

As for those of you who may see a similairty between the title and another name.... Purely coinicidental, I didn''t even see it myself, my friend did.
Well, since my first commenter already thinks there's more to the story...
I'll admit, part of this poem has a truth to it. I've felt like the doll, but maybe not as strongly as the words imply. But the words have to be strong, or else, why would it be poetry?
But then again, there are a few lines that just sound good; and I have no clue how it would feel to be like that. But yeah, take everything with a grain of salt{For not everything is how it seems}.

Comments are fun, Faves are caring, but Criticism is Love.
Criticism Highly Encouraged: including the Literary kind

(c) KamikazeGeisha, aka Anastasia Marie

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~Terminatorshades18 May 1, 2009, 10:03:20 AM
...I'm not sure if I should be impressed or concerned. I definitely see a double meaning.

--
"Live right now, just be yourself, it doesn't matter if it's good enough for someone else." -The middle by Jimmy eat world
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~KamikazeGeisha May 2, 2009, 2:07:57 AM
Concerned? Why, love?

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I've decided to make my signature into a shameful advertisement for a Naruto fanfic. Because I have no decency: [link]
~~I <3 Chemistry~~
~Yes, I made my avatar~
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~KamikazeGeisha May 5, 2009, 3:46:35 PM
That's no very explanatory....

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I've decided to make my signature into a shameful advertisement for a Naruto fanfic. Because I have no decency: [link]
~~I <3 Chemistry~~
~Yes, I made my avatar~
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~Terminatorshades18 May 12, 2009, 4:40:33 PM
I'm commenting!!! Commenting, commenting, commenting! XD

Alrighty, critiquing... Well, I can't really think of anything bad to say...except, um, the spacing with the word "duty" in the beginning is a little strange. (I know, that's so hurtful) And, personally, I don't think the underlining is needed. It makes me feel like you're trying to force me to interpret it you're way instead of my own way... That might just be me and my authority issues... lol

Now, to the good stuff... I love, love, love the ending! Was the rhyming of play and and obey a coincidence or planned? It worked very well! I also like how you organized the stanzas and used the repetition of "C'mon Ragdoll" It really drives it home. I definitely think this is one of your best (Though death bell will always be my favorite). This can take close second :)

P.S You're writing is more direct and passionate when you're writing about something that's real instead of fictional. I could definitely tell this was something real. Finally, I downloaded "Careless Whisper" and I want to tell you that I hate you. It's been stuck in my head all night -_- Good song.

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"Live right now, just be yourself, it doesn't matter if it's good enough for someone else." -The middle by Jimmy eat world
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~KamikazeGeisha May 12, 2009, 4:54:11 PM
Yay Yay Yay!
Hmm... I didn't realize it was odd... Mayhaps I will change...
Haha, actually the underlining is for when its spoken. Ask ~nikiera : like "I", this sounds so much better when you're listening.
Rhymning? what rhymning?! *re-reads* Oh, that. Grr~ Actually, that was planned, but mostly planned for the syllables, not the rhyme(sorry)
Yay for second! The line "C'mon Ragdoll" is supposed to be said with a southern drawl. >.<

P.S. Hmmm... So when haven't I been real, according to this theory? O.o
And... MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! 'tis good. And annoying. But mostly good ^-^

PSS: Thank you for critique/commenting *hugs*

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I've decided to make my signature into a shameful advertisement for a Naruto fanfic. Because I have no decency: [link]
~~I <3 Chemistry~~
~Yes, I made my avatar~
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~Terminatorshades18 May 13, 2009, 3:44:16 PM
Response to the "P.S":

By "real," I mean something that's happening in real life or you relate to your life. Maybe, I'm crazy, but I think when you're writing about fictional things, like in "I," it doesn't sound as good as when you're writing about real life things like in "Chapter 23." Although, "Death Bell" is my favorite and that was fictional... never mind then, I'm most certainly crazy.

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"Live right now, just be yourself, it doesn't matter if it's good enough for someone else." -The middle by Jimmy eat world
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~KamikazeGeisha May 13, 2009, 5:28:39 PM
Hmm, ok. I thought I was really good...
Which other ones do you think are "real"?

Haha, you're right about Ch. 23 and I.
But the Death Bell was real, to me. Didn't I tell you--- the real death bell is on campus:)

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I've decided to make my signature into a shameful advertisement for a Naruto fanfic. Because I have no decency: [link]
~~I <3 Chemistry~~
~Yes, I made my avatar~
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~Terminatorshades18 May 15, 2009, 1:40:14 PM
YOU ARE REALLY GOOD! I was just saying that you're even better when you write about real life experiences.

...We have a death bell on campus? Why do I feel like this has something to do with Mrs. Thompson?

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"Live right now, just be yourself, it doesn't matter if it's good enough for someone else." -The middle by Jimmy eat world
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